The line chart below shows the number of cars produced in three countries from 2003 to 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart below shows the number of cars produced in three countries from 2003 to 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graphs illustrate the
number
of
car
productions from three different countries including
Argentina
,
Australia
and
Thailand
, between 2003 and 2009.
Overall
, it can be seen that the total
number
of both vehicle productions of
Australia
and
Thailand
steadily increased over the
6 years
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6-year
period.
While
the
number
of
Argentina
's produced
cars
showed
significant
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a significant
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decline. In 2003, the
number
of
cars
produced by
Thailand
was relatively low
with
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just below 200.
This
figure increased consistently and tripled its
number
in 2005
,
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before continue rising to reach approximately 1000 in 2009.
Australia
's
cars
began with 300 in 2003, and
then
slightly
incline
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inclined
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to 400 in the next two years, before surging to the highest
number
among
three
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the three
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countries in the end, with 1999.
In contrast
,
Argentina
began with the
greastest
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greatest
car's
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car
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production
, it experienced
gradual
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a gradual
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decline, by the end of the period, its
production
was the lowest with 100. there was
notable
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the notable
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point at around 2004,
where
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when
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car
production
in all countries had the same amount. In conclusion, both
Australia
and
Thailand
showed significant growth in
car's
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car
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production
along 6
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over the 6-year
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year-period
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period
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.
While
the
number
of
Argentina
cars
began with relatively higher, it decreased considerably to the same
number
with
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as
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two others in 2004 and continued to the least in the end.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, car, argentina, australia, thailand, cars, production with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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