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The line chart below shows the number of cars produced in three countries from 2003 to 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart below shows the number of cars produced in three countries from 2003 to 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs illustrate the
number
 of
car
 productions from three different countries including
Argentina
,
Australia
 and
Thailand
, between 2003 and 2009.
Overall
, it can be seen that the total
number
 of both vehicle productions of
Australia
 and
Thailand
 steadily increased over the
6 years
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6-year
 period.
While
 the
number
 of
Argentina
's produced
cars
 showed
significant
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a significant
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 decline. In 2003, the
number
 of
cars
 produced by
Thailand
 was relatively low
with
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apply
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just below 200.
This
 figure increased consistently and tripled its
number
 in 2005
,
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 before continue rising to reach approximately 1000 in 2009.
Australia
's
cars
 began with 300 in 2003, and
then
 slightly
incline
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inclined
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 to 400 in the next two years, before surging to the highest
number
 among
three
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the three
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 countries in the end, with 1999.
In contrast
,
Argentina
 began with the
greastest
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greatest
car's
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car
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production
, it experienced
gradual
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a gradual
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 decline, by the end of the period, its
production
 was the lowest with 100. there was
notable
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the notable
a notable
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 point at around 2004,
where
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when
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car
production
 in all countries had the same amount. In conclusion, both
Australia
 and
Thailand
 showed significant growth in
car's
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car
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production
along 6
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over the 6-year
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year-period
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period
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.
While
 the
number
 of
Argentina
cars
 began with relatively higher, it decreased considerably to the same
number
with
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as
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 two others in 2004 and continued to the least in the end.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, car, argentina, australia, thailand, cars, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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