the chart and table below give information about population figure in Japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the chart and table below give information about population figure in Japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting  the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart and table below
shows
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show
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the value of
population
figures in
Japan
during the period between 1950 and 2055.  In general, It is proven that the
population
in
Japan
was increasing
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increased
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from 1950 to 2005. The highest
population
had
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reached
on
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in
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2005 but at some point, It will
have been decreasing
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before
reached
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reaching
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the second lowest point for the next 50 years.
Japan
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Japan's
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population
is going to decrease extremely from 2010 to 2055 with only 89,9 million
population
at the end
of
period
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the period
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.
However
, the graph shows that the value had constantly increased from 1950 to 2005 with 84,1 and 127,8 million
population
respectively.  The data
also
tells us that the over-65s
population
had increased from 1950 to 2005.
In addition
, it is
also
will have been increasing until 2035.
On the other hand
at the end
of the predicted period,
Japan
will only have 36.5 million
of
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old people.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, japan with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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