The maps below show a town centre in 1990 and the same town centre today.
The maps illustrate a
town
centre
in 1990 and the town
centre
today.
The town
centre
in 1990 had a newsagent and a couple of stores like Grocer
, baker's, and cafe, Correct article usage
a Grocer
however
, these stores got replaced by a new shopping mall and a children
Change noun form
children's
centre
is still next to it. In the middle of the town
centre
, both of the maps have a Park, Library, and Town
Hall, although
the name of the street below them got changed from Green Street to Apartment Block. There was a Bank in 1990 next to the Town
hall precisely in the east, now it got
changed into a cafe.
In the end, the map in the past had a significant improvement, Wrong verb form
has been
thus
, everybody can notice the big changes, although
, most of the stores in those maps got only a position change but
, it is still a nice improvement, Remove the conjunction
apply
nevertheless
, a small upgrade better than nothing.Submitted by Endo on
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