The maps below show a town centre in 1990 and the same town centre today.

The maps below show a town centre in 1990 and the same town centre today.
The maps illustrate a
town
centre
in 1990 and the
town
centre
today. The
town
centre
in 1990 had a newsagent and a couple of stores like
Grocer
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a Grocer
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, baker's, and cafe,
however
, these stores got replaced by a new shopping mall and a
children
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children's
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centre
is still next to it. In the middle of the
town
centre
, both of the maps have a Park, Library, and
Town
Hall,
although
the name of the street below them got changed from Green Street to Apartment Block. There was a Bank in 1990 next to the
Town
hall precisely in the east, now it
got
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has been
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changed into a cafe. In the end, the map in the past had a significant improvement,
thus
, everybody can notice the big changes,
although
, most of the stores in those maps got only a position change
but
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, it is still a nice improvement,
nevertheless
, a small upgrade better than nothing.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town, centre with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "improvement" was used 2 times.
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