The charts below show the change in ownerships of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in housholds in oun country between 1920 to 2019.

The charts below show the change in ownerships of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in housholds in oun country between 1920 to 2019.
The chart provides information about the relation
of
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number
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of hours of
housework
and the percentage of electrical appliances per household during the period 1920 to 2019.
It is clear that
the usage of electrical appliances has an increasing trend
whereas
the amount of time dedicated to
housework
shows a downturn. First of all,
refrigerator
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the refrigerator
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was the least used electronic device compared to washing
machine
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machines
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and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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which rated roughly 5% in 1920.
However
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it had a sharp increase to 55% in 1940, 90% in 1960 and reached a peak in 1980 at 100%.
Then
it remained stable until 2019. Vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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climbed up steadily from 30% in 1920 to 100% in 2000
then
stayed constant until 2019.
On the other hand
,
proportion
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the proportion
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of washing machine usage slightly fluctuated.
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figure rose from 40% in 1920 to 70% in 1960 but had
an
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fall in 1980 to approximately 65%.
Then
it increased constantly again to nearly 78% in 2019. We can see that as number of hours of
housework
per week, per household showed a decreasing tendency as more people started to use
electronical
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electrical
electronic
appliances. The figure
of
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the amount of time used for
housework
dropped dramatically from 50% in 1920 to 20% in 1960.
Then
it had a gradual decline until 2019 to 10%.
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