IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph below shows changes in the amount of coffee exported from three countries between 2002 and 2012 You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph below shows changes in the amount of coffee exported from three countries between 2002 and 2012 You should write at least 150 words.
#minutes #line #changes #amount #coffee #three #countries
The line graphs present the total amount of exported
coffee
 from three different countries including
Brazil
,
Colombia
,
Costa
Correct word choice
and Costa
show examples
Rica
, from 2002 to 2012 with 2
year-interval
Correct your spelling
interval
show examples
.
Overall
, it can be seen that all countries increased significantly in
coffee
exportes
Correct your spelling
exports
exporters
 over the ten
year-period
Correct your spelling
year period
show examples
.
Brazil
 had
cosistently
Correct your spelling
consistently
 dominated the others,
which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
followed by
Colombia
. Unfortunately,
Costa
Rica
 was
relativelty
Correct your spelling
relatively
 low at the start
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 and remained the
thrid
Correct your spelling
third
show examples
place
at the
end
 of the given period. In 2002,
Brazil
 began
with
Change preposition
in
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
second
place
 at 12
million
 kilograms lower than
Costa
Rica
.
It
Correct pronoun usage
Its
show examples
 figure rose substantially, reaching 20
million
 in 2008, followed by a minimal decrease to roughly 17
million
 in 2012, and
then
 surged rapidly to over 25
million
at the
end
.
Total
Add an article
The total
show examples
 amount of
coffee
 exported by
Costal
Correct your spelling
Costa
show examples
Rica
 had the
higest
Correct your spelling
highest
 number at
start
Add an article
the start
show examples
, experiencing a notable drop
at
Change preposition
in
show examples
 2006 with 7
million
, and
then
 increased dramatically to 20
millions
Change to singular
million
show examples
at
Change preposition
in
show examples
 2012, which
lower
Add a missing verb
was lower
show examples
 than
Brazil
Change preposition
in Brazil
show examples
.
Moreover
,
Colombia
 began with
lowest
Change the article
the lowest
show examples
place
 with 5
million
at
Change preposition
in
show examples
 2002 and experienced some fluctuation between 2002 and 2008,
then
 rose considerably from 2
million
at
Change preposition
in
show examples
 2008 to 15
miliion
Correct your spelling
million
at the
end
. In summary,
Brazil
hold
Wrong verb form
held
show examples
 the first
place
 in
number
Change the article
a number
the number
show examples
 of exported
coffee
 by the
end
 of the given period, which exceeded
Costa
Rica
 that has the highest number at the beginning.
While
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
Colombia
remained
Verb problem
had
show examples
 the lowest amount of exported
coffee
 at the start and in the
end
.
Submitted by sippakorn.wet on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, brazil, colombia, costa, rica, place, end, million with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: