University students always focus on one specific subject, but some people think that universities should encourage their students to study a wide range of subjects in addition to their own subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Education, education, education is a key success of
students
. Some say that
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Students
are given Concentration by one major subject, but others say they should learn broad
subjects
including their own Subject I Strongly agree with
this
statement because it enhances skill Knowledge and creates multifarious employment opportunities.
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essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons. To commence with, university learners should
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to learn a wide range of
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because it helps to improve
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students'
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Skill development.
That is
to say,
major
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a major
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subject not only helps to understand
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life skills but
also
other major Courses can assist
to develop
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in developing
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skills.
For example
, Physics major pupils
if
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learn's
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computer science for their additional course,
it
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will help
for
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in
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their future
Career
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.
In other words
,
students
have a chance to learn other major
subjects
as their minor courses.
Furthermore
, learning
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range of additional
Subjects
that
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apply
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create
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creates
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more employment opportunities
to
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for
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College
leamers
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learners
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because they learn many
subjects
, So they have a basic knowledge
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all
subjects
.
As a result
; broad employment chances are opened, and easily get a
job
.
For instance
, in 2017,
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university
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, 73% of the degree holders got Jobs in Cross majors, which is
minor
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a minor
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subjor
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subject
was helped
to
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them to
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enter the
job
world,
due to
demand
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of
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the
Job
. In Conclusion, University
Students
should
encourage
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to Study other
subjects
besides
their majors because it enables more
job
chances
along with
skill development.
Therefore
, I strongly agree
this
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, college
students
Should learn wide
subjects
and it brings more benefits to Society too.
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task achievement
Try using a more formal approach in the introduction, and clarify the main points that will be discussed in the essay.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph starts with a clear topic sentence to guide the reader through the arguments presented in the essay.
coherence cohesion
Use more precise language and avoid mixing up terms like 'major' and 'minor' subjects to enhance clarity.
task achievement
Good attempt at introducing the argument and providing a personal stance on the topic.
coherence cohesion
The essay does present an introduction and a conclusion, which helps frame the discussion.
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Relevant examples are given to support the points made, which strengthens the argument.

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