University students always focus on one specific subject, but some people think that universities should encourage their students to study a wide range of subjects in addition to their own subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Education, education, education is a key success of

students

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. Some say that

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Students

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are given Concentration by one major subject, but others say they should learn broad

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including their own Subject I Strongly agree with

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statement because it enhances skill Knowledge and creates multifarious employment opportunities.

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essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons. To commence with, university learners should

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to learn a wide range of

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because it helps to improve

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Skill development.

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to say,

major

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subject not only helps to understand

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life skills but

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other major Courses can assist

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skills.

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, Physics major pupils

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apply

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learn's

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computer science for their additional course,

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will help

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their future

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students

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have a chance to learn other major

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as their minor courses.

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, learning

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range of additional

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that

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create

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more employment opportunities

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College

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learners

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because they learn many

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, So they have a basic knowledge

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all

subjects

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; broad employment chances are opened, and easily get a

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, in 2017,

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university

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, 73% of the degree holders got Jobs in Cross majors, which is

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subjor

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was helped

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enter the

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world,

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demand

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the

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. In Conclusion, University

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should

encourage

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to Study other

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besides

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their majors because it enables more

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chances

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skill development.

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, college

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Should learn wide

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and it brings more benefits to Society too.

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task achievement

Try using a more formal approach in the introduction, and clarify the main points that will be discussed in the essay.

coherence cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph starts with a clear topic sentence to guide the reader through the arguments presented in the essay.

coherence cohesion

Use more precise language and avoid mixing up terms like 'major' and 'minor' subjects to enhance clarity.

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Good attempt at introducing the argument and providing a personal stance on the topic.

coherence cohesion

The essay does present an introduction and a conclusion, which helps frame the discussion.

task achievement

Relevant examples are given to support the points made, which strengthens the argument.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

257 words

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