The table shows the average number of vehicles per hour on two roads during the week. The pie charts show the proportion of different types of transportation using each road.
The bar graph shows the percentage breakdown of the average vehicle type used by commuters per hour on two specific roads.
This
data was obtained after one week observation
. The table Change preposition
of observation
on the other hand
shows percentage
breakdown Correct article usage
a percentage
for
the Change preposition
of
reason
why Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
people
drive cars
to commute in the city.
Firstly
, cars
are the most commonly used motor vehicle in the city. 45 % of all people
used cars
as their main mode of transportation. This
is followed closely by light rail transit at 35 %. During the same time period bus
and Fix the agreement mistake
buses
taxi's
show only very minor usage at 10 % each.
Change noun form
taxis
Secondly
, commuting to work is the most common reason why people
used
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use
cars
. This
is followed closely by business related
travel and dropping children Add a hyphen
business-related
to
school at 45 % and 40 % respectively. Change preposition
at
Lastly
, shopping and leisure activities showed only 15% during the same time period.
In summary, cars
are the most common
used for transportation and travelling for work is Change the word
commonly
most
common reason cited by Correct article usage
the most
people
for using this
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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