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The charts below show information about the average spending of a typical household in four different countries in the year 2020 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show information about the average spending of a typical household in four different countries in the year 2020 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the disparity between the 4
countries
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 regarding the average purchase of a decent household in 2020.
Overall
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,
while
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 the utility
sector
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 seems stable in four
countries
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, every other
sector
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 including
Food
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, Rent and Mortgage, and
Entertainment
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 varies conspicuously.
In addition
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, most of the listed
countries
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 had a dominant
sector
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. On the one hand, In Vietnam and Bangladesh, the spending of a typical household on sustenance is taking the lead. In Vietnam, a family could spend 60% of their aggregated money on
food
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, which is more than 30% of the spending on
Utilities
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, and 5% on the rest including
Entertainment
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 and Mortgage. In Bangladesh,
however
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, they spent 10% more on
food
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 than Vietnam, 18% of the total spending is on
Utilities
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, 10% on
Entertainment
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 - and 8% more on the Accommodation
sector
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.
On the other hand
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, the US
entertainment
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sector
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 dominates the rest, with 40% of total spending,
while
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food
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 and
utilities
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 are only 30% and 20% respectively, with the rest 10% in rental. Interestingly, in Singapore,
While
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Mortage
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mortgage
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 is less spent in other
countries
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, 30% of the spending is on Rental and Accommodation, which is 9% and 18% more than
Utilities
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 and
Entertainment
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, respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, sector, food, entertainment, utilities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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