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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The diagram illustrates the alterations of the site of an airport’s appearance after the redevelopment of the following year
Overall
,
while
 some places are kept in identical locations, certain extensions in the site’s
area
 and additional services are conspicuous. On the one hand, in both maps, the two gates of the Security
Passport
 Control and
Passport
 Control Customs - which are divided into two sectors that cater to the customer’s intention of departing or arriving - are not relocated. On the Departure side, certain shifts are made as not only the Cafe and Check-in stand are relocated, but they
also
 add the Bag drop and Shop sites.
Similarly
, on the arrival side, the Cafe, ATM, and Car hire were added
while
 the current
area
 was empty.
On the other hand
, in the upper
area
 after passing
Passport
 control and customs gates, significant extensions in the
area
 will be made as more areas will be extended and opened on both the Left and Right sides of the
area
.
Furthermore
,
while
 a walkway is established from the
passport
 gate to the end of the
area
, it will be supplanted by a sky train route for
further
 travelling efficacy.
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clarity
Rephrase sentences to achieve more clarity and fluency. For example, 'on the Arrival side, the Cafe, ATM, and Car hire were added' could be rephrased to 'On the Arrival side, new services such as the Cafe, ATM, and Car hire will be added.'
structure
Provide a brief conclusion summarizing the overall changes in the redevelopment to round off the essay.
grammar & tense consistency
Ensure the use of consistent tenses throughout the essay. For instance, ‘Cafe, ATM, and Car hire were added’ should be 'will be added', to align with the future context of the redevelopment.
task achievement
Good understanding of the task and accurately described the main features of the airport redevelopment.
structure
Effective use of paragraphs to organize information logically.
vocabulary
Accurate use of vocabulary to describe changes and contrasts.

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