The table below gives information about student enrolments at Bristol University in 1928, 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table presents data on student enrolments at Bristol University in the years 1928, 1958 and 2008.
Overall
, it is clear from the table that the average number of enrolments experienced a significant rise, while
the variety of students
places of origin followed opposite
trend.
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1928, a significant portion of Change the article
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students
hailed from area
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areas
this
number dramatically declined to just 2% by the end of the period. The percentage of international students
,
was at 5% from three countries, grew to nearly 30%, representing 98 countries by the close of the period, even though the increase Remove the comma
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of
international Change preposition
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enrolment
was not steady.
From the start, student enrolment
steadily rose, beginning at 218, climbing to 1,046 and eventually peaking at 6377, in the year 2008. Although
,
the Remove the comma
apply
persentage
of female Correct your spelling
percentage
students
initially
dropped by 10%, it latrr
grew up from 32% to nearly 55%, overtaking the male Correct your spelling
later
enrolment
, which stood at 46% in
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apply
this
year. Finally
, male
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the male
enrolment
rate experienced slight
increase from 58% to approximately 70%, before eventually falling below that of the Add an article
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female
students
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