The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six - art related subjects at a UK university in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six - art related subjects at a UK university in 2011. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the number of male and female students who studied six subjects related to art in the United Kingdom’s university during 2011.
Overall
, it can be seen from the diagram
women
dominated in all subjects except art and design. The
most
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favourite subjects chosen by both the
gendres
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genders
genres
English language and literature and the least selected by the
men
were philosophy history and
archeology
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by
women
. It is conspicuous that 250 of the
women
studied English language and literature and
men
were slightly less
about
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225.
Secondly
, the linguistics subject was studied by
women
240 as compared to
men
those were 180 in the same year.
In addition
, the communication and media study was 225 by ladies and 205 by gents. Probing ahead, boys
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50
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selected philosophy and girls 150, females took more interest in
this
subject. The second lowest subject was history and archaeology, it was 90 by
men
and 120 by girls.
Finally
,
men
were the highest who studied art and design 175 and females only 160 in the same year.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • gender distribution
  • imbalance
  • participation
  • trend
  • highlight
  • significant
  • relatively balanced
  • disparity
  • societal factors
  • career opportunities
  • art-related subjects
  • analyze
  • compare and contrast
  • determine
  • discuss
  • cultural influences
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