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You have been doing some voluntary work to help your local community. However, now you are unable to continue doing this work. Write a letter to the manager of the organisation where you have been working. In your letter: describe the work you have been doing explain why you can no longer do this work recommend another person who is interested in the work

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
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 letter to inform you that I won't be able to continue to do the
work
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 in which I am enrolled.I am currently doing voluntary
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 among the families who have lost their properties in the flood that laid waste to our town a year ago. I have been doing
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work
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 for the past 6 months. I finished my bachelor's degree in physical therapy a year ago and
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 applied for a job in England. I was waiting for the approval of my application and I will be moving to Liverpool
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England within 2 months
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after
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 I got selected for
the
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apply
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work
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 in the field of pediatric physical therapy. I will be still here for another 2 months
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 I need
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 a month to prepare for my departure and another month to spend time with my family. I indeed enjoyed doing
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 service voluntarily in
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 service without being paid as I was accepted as a dear family member of those who lost their properties in
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.They used to forget their sorrows when I
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 with them and
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 I will
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 them.
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, I would like to recommend another person who can show empathy and understand their trials and difficulties. Your's sincerely, Paul Joshi Surendar R.
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coherence cohesion
To further enhance clarity, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea. This will make your letter more readable and engaging.
task achievement
Including more details about the person you are recommending, such as their qualifications or why they would be a good fit, would strengthen your recommendation.
task achievement
The tone of your letter is suitable and conveys a genuine sense of responsibility and empathy.
coherence cohesion
Your letter is logically structured with an appropriate greeting and closing.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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