The provided table illustrates the figure of income and allocating on diet and clothes and the pie charts show the spending of allocating by family in a particular city in the United Kingdom between 2010 and 2013. The units are measured by poundsterling.

The provided table illustrates the figure of income and allocating on diet and clothes and the pie charts show the spending of allocating by family in a particular city in the United Kingdom between 2010 and 2013. The units are measured by poundsterling.
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The table shows the total
income
and the total expenditure on food and
clothes
in 2010 and 2013. Meanwhile, the pie illustrates the
detail
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allocation of family
spend
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on
foods
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food
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and
clothes
in a particular city in the United Kingdom (UK) in the same period.
Overall
, the total
income
decreased but the spend had a slight
increased
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with some changes
of
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their
spend
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allocation.
Firstly
, the total
income
of
family
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a family
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in the UK was 29 thousand pounds in 2010
then
it decreased by 4
thousands
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in the next 3 years.
In contrast
, the total
income
slightly increased from 14
thousands
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thousand
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in 2010 to 15
thousands
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thousand
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poundsterling
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pound sterling
in 2013. Looking at the
detail
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details
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of the expenditure proportion, meat and fish had the biggest proportion in a family expense with a quarter of the
overall
expenditure in 2010, followed by
clothes
, and fruit and vegetables, with 22% and 20%, respectively. Afterwards, the allocation of fruits and vegetables rose massively
with
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35% in 2013.
However
, the proportion of meat
and
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fish, and
clothes
declined quite a lot, with not more than a third if combined.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words income, clothes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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