The provided table illustrates the figure of income and allocating on diet and clothes and the pie charts show the spending of allocating by family in a particular city in the United Kingdom between 2010 and 2013. The units are measured by poundsterling.
The table shows the total
income
and the total expenditure on food and clothes
in 2010 and 2013. Meanwhile, the pie illustrates the detail
allocation of family Replace the word
detailed
spend
on Wrong verb form
spending
foods
and Fix the agreement mistake
food
clothes
in a particular city in the United Kingdom (UK) in the same period. Overall
, the total income
decreased but the spend had a slight increased
with some changes Replace the word
increase
of
their Change preposition
in
spend
allocation.
Replace the word
spending
Firstly
, the total income
of family
in the UK was 29 thousand pounds in 2010 Add an article
a family
the family
then
it decreased by 4 thousands
in the next 3 years. Change to singular
thousand
In contrast
, the total income
slightly increased from 14 thousands
in 2010 to 15 Change to singular
thousand
thousands
Change to singular
thousand
poundsterling
in 2013.
Looking at the Correct your spelling
pound sterling
detail
of the expenditure proportion, meat and fish had the biggest proportion in a family expense with a quarter of the Fix the agreement mistake
details
overall
expenditure in 2010, followed by clothes
, and fruit and vegetables, with 22% and 20%, respectively. Afterwards, the allocation of fruits and vegetables rose massively with
35% in 2013. Change preposition
to
However
, the proportion of meat and
fish, and Correct word choice
apply
clothes
declined quite a lot, with not more than a third if combined.Submitted by bhaswarawira on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, clothes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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