The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site
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According to
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the maps, there are future industrial area improvements and the situation at the moment in the city of Norbiton.
Overall
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, the most striking change is that all factories now will be replaced by other constructions, like housing.
Furthermore
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, there is a plan to develop the territory of the site.
It is clear that
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the principal change is that the main road would be much longer and even cross the river and get to the area of farmland.
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, there will be housing in the north of the river and in the west of farmland. Meanwhile, on the south shore build new buildings.
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, the school is on the east side of the main circle.
Secondly
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is the playground, which is on the same road as the school,
however
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, you need to turn to the north. On the south side of the ring will be the medical centre and shops.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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