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The chart below shows estimated world literacy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The chart below shows estimated world literacy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
The graph illustrates the world literacy
rates
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by
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in
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 six different
region
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regions
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 between
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 in 2000. World literacy
rates
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 show a significant gap between Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States, and South
Asia
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 with another three regions both in two genders. People in that
areas
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area
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 are likely to have
an
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the
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 initiative to read books or
another
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other
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 literature sources.
For instance
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, roughly 55 per 100 female individuals in South East
Asia
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has
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have
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 habits for reading,
while
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 over 30%
men
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of men
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also
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has does too
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have to
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.
Same
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The same
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 pattern applied for
Sub-Sahabaran
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Sub-Saharan
 Africa and Arab States
rates
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 that
has
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have
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 a proportion
slighty
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slightly
 under.
In contrast
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,
developed
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in developed
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 countries people almost
has
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have
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 no feeling
to read
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about reading
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 something.
Meanwhile
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Meanwhile,
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 in Latin America and East
Asia
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, the literacy
rates
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 approach almost 10% for each gender, except
on
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in
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 East
Asia
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. Women in East
Asia
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has
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have
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a doubling
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a doubling rate
doubling rates
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rates
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 from men in East
Asia
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 in reading
a
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apply
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text
rates
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.
Also
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, the data shows women
has
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have
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 more ability and feeling to get
a new information
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new information
a piece of new information
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 from reading something.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rates, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • literacy rates
  • gender gap
  • regional disparities
  • socio-economic factors
  • male literacy
  • female literacy
  • overviews
  • notable differences
  • highest literacy regions
  • moderate literacy regions
  • lowest literacy regions
  • estimated data
  • educational attainment
  • cultural influences
  • development levels
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