The chart below shows estimated world literacy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The chart below shows estimated world literacy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
The graph illustrates the world literacy
rates
by
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six different
region
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regions
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between
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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in 2000. World literacy
rates
show a significant gap between Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States, and South
Asia
with another three regions both in two genders. People in that
areas
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area
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are likely to have
an
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initiative to read books or
another
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other
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literature sources.
For instance
, roughly 55 per 100 female individuals in South East
Asia
has
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habits for reading,
while
over 30%
men
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of men
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also
has does too
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.
Same
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The same
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pattern applied for
Sub-Sahabaran
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Sub-Saharan
Africa and Arab States
rates
that
has
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have
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a proportion
slighty
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slightly
under.
In contrast
,
developed
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in developed
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countries people almost
has
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have
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no feeling
to read
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about reading
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something.
Meanwhile
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in Latin America and East
Asia
, the literacy
rates
approach almost 10% for each gender, except
on
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East
Asia
. Women in East
Asia
has
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have
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a doubling
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a doubling rate
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rates
from men in East
Asia
in reading
a
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apply
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text
rates
.
Also
, the data shows women
has
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have
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more ability and feeling to get
a new information
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new information
a piece of new information
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from reading something.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words rates, asia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • literacy rates
  • gender gap
  • regional disparities
  • socio-economic factors
  • male literacy
  • female literacy
  • overviews
  • notable differences
  • highest literacy regions
  • moderate literacy regions
  • lowest literacy regions
  • estimated data
  • educational attainment
  • cultural influences
  • development levels
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