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The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates changes in the member number of a variety of entertainment at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.
Overall
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, it could be observed from the chart that the film club was the most popular activity in
this
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 centre. It is
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 worth noting that the figures for amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances saw more significant changes than those for martial arts. To be more specific, the number of participants joining in film club was the highest among 5 listed types of divertissement, which fluctuated slightly and ended up at 65
people
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 in 2020. Another relatively similar pattern was experienced by martial arts which remained unchanged at around 35
people
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 despite oscillating wildly. There were 25
people
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 taking part in amateur dramatics, which
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 rose minimally to nearly 30
people
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 in 2005 and suddenly sank to a mere 5
people
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 in 2020.
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, the figure for table tennis stabilized at 20
people
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 between 2005 and 2010, followed by a considerable growth to 55
people
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 in the final year. In the first 5 years, there were no participants in musical performances, but
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 it soared to nearly 20
people
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 in 2020.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rates
  • trends
  • significant increases/decreases
  • stable numbers
  • fluctuations
  • overall participation
  • comparison
  • activities
  • social centre
  • Melbourne
  • participants
  • highlight
  • report
  • graph illustrates/demonstrates
  • 20-year period
  • key features
  • main features
  • statistical data
  • variations
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