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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The bar chart compares the number of
people
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 who bought and drank
coffee
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 and
tea
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 in five Australian cities.
Overall
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it is clear that
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 visiting a
cafe
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 to have
coffee
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 or
tea
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 was the most popular habit among customers in each city
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while
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 buying fresh
coffee
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 had the lowest proportion across the five regions. The percentage of
people
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 who chose
instant
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coffee
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 ranked second compared to the other two categories. It is obvious that more than 60% of residents in Sydney, Melbourne, and Hobart chose to visit a
cafe
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 for
coffee
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 or
tea
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.
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, fewer than 20% of
people
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 in Sydney and Melbourne bought fresh
coffee
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. Meanwhile, in Hobart, the proportion of
people
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 who went to a
cafe
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 for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 was double that of those who bought fresh
coffee
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.
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, around 45% of customers in Sydney, roughly 49% in Melbourne, and approximately 54% in Hobart purchased
instant
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coffee
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. Focusing on Brisbane and Adelaide, both cities had the lowest proportion of regular fresh
coffee
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 buyers, at about 34%.
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, over 50% of customers in Adelaide preferred going to a
cafe
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 for
coffee
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 or
tea
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, and exactly 50% bought
instant
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coffee
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.
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, in Brisbane, the percentage of
people
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 who chose to visit a
cafe
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 for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 was approximately 3% lower than those who bought
instant
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coffee
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, coffee, tea, cafe, instant with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee and tea buying habits
  • instant coffee
  • fresh coffee
  • cafe culture
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • city demographics
  • seasonal trends
  • marketing strategies
  • consumer preferences
  • availability
  • popularity
  • consumption patterns
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