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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try to hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.Giving
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 message to them can produce several effects on each child.
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 social point of view, telling the children is very important because we are motivating the child not to give up.we are making him try
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 hard, to make an effort, to read between
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 of that long path achieve their objectives.Telling that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough, we are saying
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 that things are not so simple or easy but they are not
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,is all about working hard and doing our best. Sometimes
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 because we
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 always achieve our dreams or goals but it does not mean we did not try hard, there are other factors playing a role in our path.
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 economic point of view, if our objectives demand a lot of money, we are again in the same situation,
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 we work hard, it would be difficult to achieve it.
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,we are teaching
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children how life works, it demands hard work, effort, dedication, time doing things we don't like, studying and attitude.And
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 the end,if you have done all these things but you still did not achieve your goal, you will be happy anyway because you did your best.
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Ensure more specific examples are given to strengthen your argument. For instance, provide particular scenarios where children might face difficulties even after hard work.
coherence cohesion
Refine the logical structure by ensuring each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. Using connecting phrases or words can help in enhancing flow.
coherence cohesion
Consider varying sentence structure to improve readability and engagement. Avoid repetition of phrases and aim for more complex sentence patterns.
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The introduction clearly presents the topic and sets the stage for the discussion.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion successfully wraps up the main idea and offers a balanced perspective.
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The essay addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of the given message, showing a clear understanding of the prompt.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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