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As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
The ability of
people
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 to think by themselves will
decresead becuse
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decrease because
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 on computers to find
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solution
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for
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to
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there
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their
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 problems.
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disagree
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 with that argument
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because
 technology
make
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makes
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poeple
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people
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as well as
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provide
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wide
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 range of
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opportunities
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people
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Body paragraph 1
Nowadayes
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Nowadays
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 technology
espcially
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especially
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artificial intelligence make
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people
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people's
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 lives easier than before and
increse
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increase
 the throuput of these
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people
 in
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 workplace. Using computers to solve different
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 can
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enhance
time
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 that
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requierd
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required
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 without computers.
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, Chat GPT
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determind
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determined
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icreasing
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increasing
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productivity
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 in writing reports and analysing
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important data.
Body paragraph 2
In addition
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, these
advancment
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advancement
 can make a lot of
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apprentices
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people
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People
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 thinking will not
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diminish
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while
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we need a lot of
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experts
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work
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, Chat GPT
influnce
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influences
 many
people
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work
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developer
developers
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these new tech
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this new tech
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Conclusion
In conclusion,
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people
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people's
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 thinking will not
demish
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diminish
demolish
demise
while
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 using
these technology
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this technology
these technologies
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task response
To improve task response, ensure all points are articulated in a more detailed manner. Clarify ideas with more comprehensive examples and elaborate on the impact of technology beyond just specific cases like Chat GPT.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, focus on improving the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs. Some sentences appear disjointed. Utilize appropriate linking words and phrases to improve the overall flow of the essay.
task response
The essay appropriately addresses the topic, taking a clear stance that technology enhances human capabilities.
coherence and cohesion
There is a logical introduction, and the conclusion effectively summarizes the main points.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Over-reliance
  • Cognitive capabilities
  • Critical thinking
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Diminish
  • Augment
  • Natural sense of direction
  • Access to information
  • Cognitive development
  • Education reforms
  • Technological advancement
  • Nuanced position
  • Recapitulate
  • Affirm
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