IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

News editor decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspaper. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Through the years, the media world has been changing and one of the most important is where the
news
Use synonyms
 editors present the
news
Use synonyms
.
Television
Use synonyms
 and newspapers are the most common means, but there are some criteria to choose what kind of
news
Use synonyms
 to present. In
this
Linking Words
 discussion, I'm going to talk about different factors
people
Use synonyms
 take
in
Change the preposition
at
show examples
 the moment to decide where to broadcast in the media and what is considered bad or good
news
Use synonyms
. First and foremost, newspapers have, as public in most
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
cases, aged
people
Use synonyms
 who have the disposition to read an entire page about
a
Remove the article
news
a piece of news
show examples
news
Use synonyms
.
In contrast
Linking Words
,
news
Use synonyms
 broadcast
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
television
Use synonyms
are
Change the verb form
is
show examples
 watched by all kind of
people
Use synonyms
 who has less
time
Use synonyms
 to be informed. By
this
Linking Words
 I mean,
Use synonyms
television
Correct word choice
that television
show examples
 has a limited
time
Use synonyms
 to transmit all types of
news
Use synonyms
 in a short
time
Use synonyms
;
for
Linking Words
this
Linking Words
 reason,
news
Use synonyms
 of interest to a certain audience is narrow.
As a result
Linking Words
, the qualification of good or bad
news
Use synonyms
 is often given by the listener/reader. Namely, not for everyone
a
Remove the article
news
a piece of news
show examples
news
Use synonyms
 is presented as
good
Correct article usage
a good
show examples
 one; it
also
Linking Words
depends
Add the preposition
depends on
show examples
 the way it is announced and the point of reference they use. To illustrate the
last
Linking Words
 idea, a
news
Use synonyms
 can be
contemplated as
Verb problem
considered
show examples
 excellent
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
television
Use synonyms
 if the broadcaster has the capability to summarise much information in a short
time
Use synonyms
. In the same way,
a
Remove the article
news
a piece of news
show examples
news
Use synonyms
 in a newspaper is considered as good if the writer details it profoundly.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, bad
news
Use synonyms
 can become fake
news
Use synonyms
; it depends if it is a lie and
the
Correct word choice
if the
show examples
 receptor even trusts it. All things considered, there is a big responsibility between the means and the
news
Use synonyms
 consumers to be honest and clear at the
time
Use synonyms
 to transmit it.
In addition
Linking Words
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
this
Linking Words
, means can not use the power of broadcast to manipulate the information, and to finish,
people
Use synonyms
doesn't
Change the verb form
don't
show examples
 have to believe everything and
the
Add a missing verb
have the
show examples
 moral responsibility to interrogate the veracity of each content they consume.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

complete response
Your essay provides a clear response to the prompt. However, it would benefit from more specific examples to support your points. Include data or relevant news stories as examples.
clear comprehensive ideas
Some of your ideas are clear, but certain parts of the essay are a bit ambiguous or lack depth. For example, the section discussing 'bad news becoming fake news' could be elaborated further for clarity.
relevant specific examples
Attempt to provide more specific examples to illustrate your points. This will make your arguments more convincing and robust.
logical structure
While your essay has a logical structure, try to ensure each paragraph flows smoothly into the next. This will help maintain the reader's attention and understanding.
introduction conclusion present
You've done well in including both an introduction and a conclusion. Ensure that the conclusion ties back directly to the points discussed in the body paragraphs for a stronger finish.
supported main points
Your main points could use more detailed support. Try to expand on your ideas with examples and explanations to strengthen your argument.
introduction conclusion present
You have successfully included both an introduction and a conclusion, which helps frame your essay well.
complete response
Your essay touches upon important aspects of how news is chosen and the effect of good and bad news, which shows your understanding of the topic.
clear comprehensive ideas
You demonstrate an understanding of the different audiences for television and newspapers, which strengthens the relevance of your essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • news value
  • timeliness
  • significance
  • proximity
  • human interest
  • conflict
  • audience preferences
  • viewer ratings
  • reader surveys
  • social media insights
  • advertising revenue
  • editorial policies
  • public interest
  • social issues
  • political influence
  • resource availability
What to do next:
Look at other essays: