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The table below provides statistics on several major metro(MRT) system aroun dthe world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below provides statistics on several major metro(MRT) system aroun dthe world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the databases on diverse major metro (MRT) systems in six countries. Units are different years completed, total
length
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, and
money
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 carrying pre-
year
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 a sizeable city like London had the first finished subway train lines with the highest
length
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 and appropriate cost of
money
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 regarding the other cities
while
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 Los Angeles had an equal category at completed
length
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as well as
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 the capacity per
year
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.
According to
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 the given information, London town had completed the project of the MRT in 1863 with a significant
length
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 of 1100
Km
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 which is considered the longest extension around the world with 458
million
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 for a
year
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.
In addition
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, in 1890 Paris completed the motor system that carries a capacity of 850
million
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 per
year
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 with around 594
Km
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 in subway
length
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.
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, Torkyo comes next with the highest rate of
money
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 that around 1434
million
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 in a single
year
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. After 17 years , Washington DC had finished the project with 70
million
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 per
year
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 and a 114
km
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 long line. In the latter few years (1980), Kyoto did a great job at Motro lines with the lowest rate of
money
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 compared to the other towns with approximately 11
million
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 for 11
Km
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 that mean 1
million
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 for just one kilometre. In the
last
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, in 2001 Los Angeles completed the MRT which was 14
Km
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 in
length
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 and cost just 90
million
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 per
year
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words length, money, year, km, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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