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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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The chart illustrates the proportion living in urban areas in Argentina, Brazil,
Uruguay
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 and Ecuador from 1970 to 2020 and a prediction for 2030 and 2040.
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, All
the
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4 countries have shown
the
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growth
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 in population albeit at different
rate
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rates
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. At the beginning of the period,
Uruguay
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 and Ecuador citizens living in cities were one-fifth.
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, by 2020 Ecuador has shown a steady increase and it reached
to
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approximately 70%.
Uruguay
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,
on the other
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hand
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 was at
the
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its
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 peak overcoming other
counties
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countries
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 with more than 90%
habitant
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inhabitants
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 in cities. The two
counties
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countries
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 will stand by 80% and 95% people in cities by 2040 and
Uruguay
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becoming
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will become
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most
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the most
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 populated city.
Argentina
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Argentina's
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 citizens population in 1970 was around 70% and within
fifty-year
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a fifty-year
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 time
period
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period,
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 we observed
a
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decent
growth
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, taking the rate to 90% in
year
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the year
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 2020.
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, We will see
very
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a very
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minute
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slow
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growth
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 of approximately 3% in
next
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the next
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 20 years. Brazil habitants living in urban areas were half in 1970 and even after
depletion
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the depletion
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 of
rate
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the rate
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 in
1990s
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the 1990s
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, the population in 2020 was 85%. From 2020 to 2040 they
undergone
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underwent
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same
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the same
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growth
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 as Argentina, taking its percentage to above 90%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uruguay, growth with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • percentage
  • population
  • predictions
  • historical trends
  • rate of increase/decrease
  • compare/contrast
  • factors
  • influences
  • implications
  • economic development
  • government policies
  • urban growth
  • migration
  • demographic changes
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