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The table below shows information about the population of New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows information about the population of New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The table presents the data about the
population
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 of different ages in New
Zealand
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 from 2011 to 2012.
Overall
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, the highest change between these years was in the
people
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 of the oldest
age
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.
Moreover
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, there was a slight decrease in the ages below teen and there was a minor increase in
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population
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the population
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 of
people
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 of all ages. To commence with, the
people
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 below fifteen had a slight decrease of 0.2 per cent and the
people
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 group 15-39
also
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 had the same change in percentage of 0.2 per cent. The
age
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 group of 15-39 had the highest
population
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 as compared to other
age
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 groups.
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, In 2012 there were around 1.6 million
people
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 of
this
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age
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 group living in New
Zealand
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.
On the other hand
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, there were around 1.3 million
people
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 from
age
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 40-64
were
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living in New
Zealand
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. The
overall
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population
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 of New
Zealand
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 was nearly 4.5 million in 2012. The
people
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 of
age
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 65 plus were small in numbers. These
people
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 had the lowest ratio of
population
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, zealand, people, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population growth
  • age group
  • increase
  • decline
  • elderly population
  • aging population
  • working-age population
  • stable labor force
  • modest increase
  • significant change
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