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The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts
compares
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compare
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 the percentage of
travellers
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 in a European city by the four transport modes between 1960 and 2000. As shown by the graph,
It is clear that
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 In 1960,
travellers
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prefered
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preferred
 to walk, but
eventually
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eventually,
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 cars
become
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became
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 the most popular transportation in 2000. Bike and walk saw the extreme
declined
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decline
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 over the
40 years
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40-year
 period. In 1960, over 33% of
travellers
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are
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apply
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walked, which was almost 7 times of cars used by
the
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tourists.
However
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,
this
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 number decreased as low under 10% in the year 2000. Despite
cars
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car
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 usage
were
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being
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 low in the initial of the time frame, it saw
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a rose
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rose
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rise
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 become the most important transportation with over 35%. The other two top
accomodation
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accommodation
int
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in
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 1960, 1980, and 2000 were buses
,
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apply
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 and bikes. In 1960,
bike
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bikes
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 had become the second
popular
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most popular
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 transportation
modes
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mode
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 of over 25%, but the data showed that there was decreased to roughly 5%.
On the other hand
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, the proportion of
travellers
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 that
travels
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travel
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 using buses
were
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was
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 not that changed with
average
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an average
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about
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of about
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 15%
withing
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within
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 the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words travellers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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