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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. **Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features https://api.testinno.ir/api/v1/ielts/serve-file?exam_type=cambridge&file_name=3be27r5MJkQB6vNHbUugThLmYE9wLazXaLOaQqC4.png

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. **Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features https://api.testinno.ir/api/v1/ielts/serve-file?exam_type=cambridge&file_name=3be27r5MJkQB6vNHbUugThLmYE9wLazXaLOaQqC4.png
The graph demonstrates
an information
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information
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 about percentages of the
population
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 living in eastern Asian cities from 1790 to 2020,
accommodate
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accommodated
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 with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
as
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As
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 we see almost in all of
years
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the years
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 except
that
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apply
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1970 and 1990 Malaysia
has
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had
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 the most percentage during
this
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 period
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however
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however,
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 Malaysia has a fall
at
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in
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three
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the three
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 first decades but in all years has the
most
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highest
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 percentage of the
population
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 and it increased rapidly and it is predicted that will have just over 80% of the
cities
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city's
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populations
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population
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.
on the other
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hand
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hand,
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although
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 Indonesia
has
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had
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 the
least
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lowest
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population
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 living in cities in
1970s
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the 1970s
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but
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apply
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it
is
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apply
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rosed
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rose
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 fast during
this
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 period and reached about 60% from just around 15% and became the second
country
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 of
this
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 factor. Thailand
always
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has always
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 had
been
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apply
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one of the fewest
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population
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populations
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furthermore
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 it has between around 18% and 48%. it was the second
country
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 from below
at
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in
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 1970 and it will fall to
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last
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the last
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country
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 based on the chart predictions.
Philippines
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The Philippines
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 has the most rise and fall process in
this
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 chart, the chart shows that
Philippines
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the Philippines
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it
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apply
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was
a
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the
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 best
country
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 for
this
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 factor in 1990 but the predictions show that it will
be reached
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reach
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on
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apply
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the
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apply
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third place in 2040.
to sum
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up
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up,
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 all
countries
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country's
countries'
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ranking
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rankings
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has
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have
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 changed rapidly but Malaysia has the most stable ranking and increasing stably.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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