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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart displays the
number
 of households with different yearly incomes in specific
year
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years
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 including 2007, 2011 and 2015 in the United
State
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States
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.
Overall
, in the three mentioned years the
number
 of
people
 with an
income
 of 75.000-99.999 was stable at about 15
million
.
However
, the maximum
number
 of US residents who earned an annual
income
 of more than 100.000 was about 33
million
 in 2015. First of all, with a quick glance at the
chart
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chart,
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 we can see the
number
 of
people
 with an
annul
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annual
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income
50.000
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of 50.000
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-74.000
has
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apply
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remained
same
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the same
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in
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apply
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every three years and
is
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was
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 about 20
million
.
In addition
, the difference between the
number
 of
people
 with
lowest
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the lowest
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income
 and the second level (25.000-49.000) approximately remain in
same
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the same
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 amount in three years.
Meanwhile
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 both of them grew up or dawn together. The
number
 of
people
 with higher
income
 was about 30
million
 in 2007 and it decreased in 2011 and touched 28 ,but with dramatic increase have experienced the highest percentage to 33 in 2015.
Moreover
, the
number
 of
people
earned
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who earned
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 an annual
income
 of 75.000-99.000 has been in minimum proportion in every mentioned year.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, income, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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