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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make
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The graph depicts the distribution of sources of air pollution
such
 as Industry, transport, and households in the UK from 1990 to 2005.
Overall
, there is
significant
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a significant
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 decrease
of
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the
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common air pollution in Great Britain;
however
, in some
segments
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 the contamination increased. Looking at the details, the biggest decrease in harm
gases
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gas
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 production showed industry from 5.3 in 1990 to 2
million
tones
 in 2005. The outcome of industry mostly impacted in
overall
 results of the total air pollution falling, which
was
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decreased by 4
million
tones
 and reached 3
million
tones
 in 2005.
On the other hand
, the emission of gases from transport and households
flactuated
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fluctuated
 and did not change
compleatly
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completely
. Transport started with 0.6
million
tones
 in 1990, went up to 1
million
 in 1996, plammed to
lowest
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the lowest
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 level
0.5
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 in 1999, and soared to 1
million
 in 2005. The households'
emission
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emissions
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was
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were
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 almost the same, near
to
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0.4
million
tones
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tonnes
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;
however
, the final figures decreased to 0.3
million
tones
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tonnes
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, tones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 4 times.
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