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Task Achievement
Be sure to fully answer all parts of the prompt. Discuss both views systematically and then express your opinion clearly.
Task Achievement
Include specific, relevant examples to support your ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure your introduction provides a clear overview of both sides of the argument and your conclusion summarizes your main points.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to organize your ideas into clear paragraphs for each main point. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea that supports your argument.
Task Achievement
You have expressed a clear opinion on the topic, which is good.
Fully explain your ideas
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- Sentence 3 - Discussion
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