Some people think the news has no real connection to people's lives, so reading newspapers or watching news programs on television in a waste of time.Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays a few people believe that the

news

are

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a waste of time,

this

is because they think that the

news

are

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not connected to

the

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peoples’s

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people’s

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lives anymore.

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my point of view,

news

are

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more important than ever. In

this

essay

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we will discuss why

news

are

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crucial to the average person, and why

news

also

are

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significant to our society.

Firstly

news

are

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, and always

had

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has

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been

importan

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important

for the average

people

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person

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This

is because,

news

are

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the only way that we have to know what is happening in our countries

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and

arround

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around

the world.

For example

, you can read the newspaper

news

and see if there is any problem in your neighborhood,

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such as

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thieves or high flows that can delay you from going to work. If you are a newcomer, you can

also

watch the TV

news

and discover if there is some crucial information from your native country, to make sure that your Friends and family are safe.

Secondly

news

are

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also

important to

the

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society.

This

is because the Powers that be can see what is happening in other countries, and use that information to avoid problems in our countries.

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, the

goverment

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government

can know everything

that is

happening in the Ucrania-Russia war, and use it to protect our economy.

News

can help a country to develop

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highest

potencial

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potential

To conclude

, I will say that

news

are

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related to people’s lives in more ways

tan

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than

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anyone can think, and is important for us to watch them in order to know how our world works.

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coherence cohesion

Ensure that the essay maintains a consistent tone and avoids slight repetitive phrases such as 'news are.' For example, replace with: 'News is, and always has been important to average people.'

coherence cohesion

Proofread the essay for minor grammatical errors, such as 'importan' instead of 'important' and incorrect use of 'the' in 'the news are.' Consistency in subject-verb agreement will improve clarity.

coherence cohesion

To improve coherence, try linking paragraphs more effectively using transitional phrases, such as 'Moreover,' 'In addition,' or 'Furthermore.' This can help the essay flow better.

task achievement

Expand on specific examples to further clarify your points. For instance, explain more about how the news helps people in their daily lives or how governments use international news to make decisions.

coherence cohesion

The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which effectively frame the main points of the discussion.

task achievement

The essay presents several relevant examples that illustrate the importance of news to both individuals and society.

task achievement

You have addressed both perspectives in the essay (why news is seen as a waste of time and why it is important), which demonstrates a balanced approach.

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Linking words
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

262 words

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In many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue be solved.

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