The bar chart below shows of expeditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.

The bar chart below shows of expeditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.
The bar chart illustrates the information that expenditure of five various categories
such
Food
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as Food
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, Housing,
Transportation
,
Healthcare
and Clothing in different four
nation
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nations
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the USA, Canada, the UK and Japan in 2009.
Overall
,
it is clear that
most
money
was spent on housing in all
nations
except Japan.
Healthcare
and clothing were the least
amount
of expenditure. In detail, Japan spent the highest
amount
for
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food
the USA, which is around 23% and 22% was spent on housing and one in ten
amount
only spent on
transportation
but
healthcare
and clothing were spent the lowest
amount
. The USA spent more
money
on housing, at around 26% and they used 17% of
money
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the money
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on
transportation
,
14
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and 14
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% on
food
.
United
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The United
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States spent
the
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apply
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more
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most
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money
on
healthcare
as compared to other
nations
, which is around 8 per cent and
spending
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spent
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least
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the least
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amount
on clothing.
Furthermore
, Canada spent the highest
money
on
transportation
and clothing than other
nations
but they spent the largest capital on housing, at 21% and a fifth cash for
transportation
, 15 per cent on
food
and 6% and 4%
for
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clothing and
healthcare
respectively. The UK spent more cash on housing, at 24 per cent and a fifth for
food
.
Transportation
expenses
was
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were
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15% and clothing was 6% but they spent a
little
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small
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amount
on
healthcare
and the UK
spend
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spent
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the least
amount
on
healthcare
than other
nations
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, transportation, healthcare, money, nations, amount with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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