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Band 3

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

#countries #people #history #research
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higly comman
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highly common
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human
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humans
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 wonder about their inhabitant
history
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.
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interested
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 in
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history
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the history
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about
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of
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 their home locations is a controversial issue today. On the one hand many people
belive
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believe
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 that it has some advantages
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 some people think that there are a few disadvantages of finding out
these development
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. In the first
place
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 the most important
advantages
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advantage
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 of finding out
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history
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the history
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about
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of
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 where you live
give
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 us numerous
benefit
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from
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learning
origin
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the origin
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 of areas you live. If we learn
much
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many
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 more
thing
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things
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 about
areas
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the areas
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of
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where we live we more understand why we
prefer
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this
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 region in the past.
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 learning
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history
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the history
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 of
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the homeland
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homeland
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the homeland
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 will increase our
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devoted
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 to loyalty
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 we will
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trying
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 to us
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one's
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 best for our future is an additional positive effect of research
this
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. That's why I believe that whether searching origin or not is
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remerkable
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remarkable
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 signal of local people acknowledge's.
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more easy
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 that
finding
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find
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 out
these some
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this
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 information in the rural areas because of
domestic
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the domestic
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 population but in spite of the fact that it might be a little bit complex in the cities because of crowded populations is invaluable.
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up
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 taking everything into account finding out
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history
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the history
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about
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of
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 where you live has
both
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some negative effects it
seem
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 to me that its positive effect outweigh its negative effects.
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The essay presents both advantages and disadvantages of researching the history of homes.
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The introduction and conclusion are present and help frame the discussion.

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