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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart
illustrate
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 the amount of
households
 by comparing their
aniversary
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anniversary
 revenue in
a 8 years
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an 8-year
 period.
Overall
, it can be seen that there was an
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upward
inward
 trend in
number
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a number
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 of the
household
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households
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 and the amount of
family having
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families
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earning
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 at least 100,000$ witnessed the highest figure. In 2007, there
was
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 under 15
millions
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million
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households
 getting salary
rate
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rates
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 from 75,000 $ to 99,999 $.
This
 was the group with the lowest quantity in comparison to the other four groups. In the following periods,
this
 number continued
fluctuate
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 roughly and stood at exactly 15
millions
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million
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 in 2015. The figure for families having income between 50,000$ and 74,999$ maintained
a
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stability throughout 8 years at 21
millions
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million
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households
. Both people with an
earning
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earnings
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 of less than 25,000 $ to 49,000$ followed the same trend, with a slight increase in 2011 and
then
 a decrease in 2015. The former rose from 25
millions
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million
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 to 28
millions
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million
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 in 2015.
This
 figure for the latter experienced from 26
millions
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million
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 to 29
millions
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million
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. The highest
households
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number of households
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 recorded for people having an income of 100,000$ or more. Reaching at under 30
millions
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million
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 in 2007 and
then
 grew up to 33
millions
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million
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households
 in 2015. Word count: 198
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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