In some countries, even though the rates of serious crimes are decreasing, people feel less safe than ever before. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

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The number of crimes has obviously decreased

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advancements in broadcasting technologies. If a person

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harm to innocent people, their personal information and faults can be widely announced in

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the media

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essay will delve into why

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phenomenon has been caused and solutions. There is a major cause that incurs people’s anxiety and dangers in crimes.

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should convey true information to audiences without any

exaggeration

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after cross-checks.

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, recent

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and journalisms tend to overstate cases to attract more audiences than competitive broadcasting stations.

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, in Korea, a broadcasting station announced an accident

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passenger was dead as the

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to a doubtful place.

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, the

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was differed from the

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, which revealed after a few days. The

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actually drove his

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to arrive at the correct destination for the passenger, but her over-anxiety

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occurred

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her death unfortunately.

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, exaggerated

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may allow people to feel fearful excessively like

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above case. A viable solution is to enforce laws related to

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. Allowing media companies to create

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including exaggerated information will enable audiences

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anxiety excessively. If the government regulates them with stricter laws, the number of

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journalists

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including

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will

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, it will contribute to citizens

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a proper level of danger in severe cases in a positive way.

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a report, when the

Brazil

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government fostered media laws to protect audiences’ excessive danger in society, the number of

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involving

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decreased

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70% than the prior year. In conclusion, the major reason why people’s fear

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crimes

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is the

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of journalism.

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issue will be solved if the government fosters regulations about

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problem.

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Ensure to fully develop all main points with sufficient detail and examples to support all claims made in the essay. Avoid any ambiguity.

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Improve clarity and precision of language to ensure that ideas are communicated effectively. Pay close attention to grammar to avoid misunderstandings.

coherence cohesion

Organize paragraphs more effectively with clear topic sentences and logical progression from one idea to another. Improve transitions between ideas and paragraphs.

coherence cohesion

Consider using a more varied range of vocabulary and sentence structures to communicate ideas effectively and make the essay more engaging.

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The essay addresses the topic and provides relevant examples and details, making it clear that the writer understands the prompts and aims to offer comprehensive reasons and solutions.

coherence cohesion

The introduction and conclusion are present, summarizing the main points effectively.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

6.5

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

6.5

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

296 words

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Your opinion

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