The chart shows air pollution levels among four countries in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows air pollution levels among four countries in 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the environmental causes in
Elctricity
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electricity
generation, Transport and Industry levels of
the
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apply
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China
, America,
Japan
and
Australia
in the year 2012.
Overall
,
China
rises
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has
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the most air pollution in the given chart as we see. But
Australia
is
plateau
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plateauing
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over the pollution.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, America and
japan
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Japan
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is
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are
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growth
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growing
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but not reach
the
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a
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high amount of the count. The industry
who
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that
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rose
up
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all over the country is
China
which goes 80% and
then
Japan
is 44%
approximate
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. The transport facility which is highly increased is
china
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China
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in
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70% pollution but
Japan
also
reached 60% minimum. When we talk about the
elctricity
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electricity
generation so again
china
reach
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reached
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60% almost
then
30% in
the
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America
generated
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.
Also
, we see
this
time
Australia
is increased 20% barley in electricity generation
also
Australia
is dip all over the country in
environment
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the environment
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causes.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words china, japan, australia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • air pollution levels
  • sources of pollution
  • industrial pollution
  • transportation-related pollution
  • household pollution
  • highest levels
  • lowest levels
  • notable changes
  • anomalies
  • comparisons
  • summarise
  • highlight
  • analyze
  • chart
  • data
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