In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
Some nations have faced
with
the phenomenon of Change preposition
apply
people
obtaining unhealthy weight and Use synonyms
also
their bodies' well-being Linking Words
are
declining. Correct subject-verb agreement
is
This
is Linking Words
Linking Words
as
a result of two primary reasons; Change preposition
apply
unbalanced
diet and Correct article usage
an unbalanced
sedentary
Correct article usage
a sedentary
life styles
. The main solutions to tackle these threats are encouraging Correct your spelling
lifestyle
people
to do Use synonyms
fitness-training
and Correct your spelling
fitness training
emposing
high taxes on unhealthy Correct your spelling
imposing
exposing
food
.
Use synonyms
The today's
generation Correct article usage
Today's
are
used to eating fast Change the verb form
is
food
which in Use synonyms
Correct article usage
the long-term
long-term
is life-threatening. Because Correct your spelling
long term
people
are working longer hours to provide for their families, they don't have enough Use synonyms
time
to cook homemade dishes. Use synonyms
As a result
, the willingness of Linking Words
people
to eat at restaurants or pre-cooked meals Use synonyms
have
increased. Change the verb form
has
However
, these kinds of Linking Words
food
are mainly prepared Use synonyms
by
Change preposition
with
low quality
ingredients and can cause heart and kidney Add a hyphen
low-quality
damages
. Fix the agreement mistake
damage
In addition
, as adults are busy at work sitting at desks doing computer jobs, they have less leisure Linking Words
time
. Despite Use synonyms
this
, they unfortunately misallocate their Linking Words
time
Use synonyms
on
less beneficial hobbies Change preposition
to
such
as playing games on their smartphones and watching Linking Words
tv
. Correct your spelling
TV
Thus
, Linking Words
people
get obese by spending their whole work hours and free Use synonyms
time
being Use synonyms
a
couch Correct article usage
apply
potato
.
Fix the agreement mistake
potatoes
However
, Linking Words
this
conflict can be easily solved by working out frequently. Linking Words
Goveners
should offer encouraging programs to citizens so they work out more often. More gyms with affordable prices and great facilities should be built in accessible Correct your spelling
Governors
Governers
part
of the cities. Fix the agreement mistake
parts
Moreover
, authorities can take action into their own hands and higher the taxes on unhealthy Linking Words
food
. The main reason that fast Use synonyms
food
Use synonyms
are
popular is that they are priced Change the verb form
is
reasoably
. The price decrease would lead to a growth in Correct your spelling
reasonably
people
's Use synonyms
tendancy
to purchase healthier Correct your spelling
tendency
food
that Use synonyms
are
more fresh and Change the verb form
is
advantagous
. Correct your spelling
advantageous
Consequently
, by consuming the same portion size of homemade well-ingredient Linking Words
food
Use synonyms
people
get Use synonyms
less
calories rather than Change the quantifier
fewer
low quality
Add a hyphen
low-quality
food
. Use synonyms
For example
, dining out in my country is extremely expensive and there is Linking Words
10
Correct article usage
a 10
percent
tax on them so cooking at home with fresh Change the spelling
per cent
ingredient
is more budget-friendly. Fix the agreement mistake
ingredients
As a result
, most Linking Words
of
Iranians are fit and don't have Change preposition
apply
the
Correct article usage
a
confliction
with health issues.
In conclusion, Replace the word
conflict
althugh
not having Correct your spelling
although
proper
diet and frequent physical activity have caused serious worldwide Correct article usage
a proper
conflictions
, by taking two steps it can be tackled. Replace the word
conflicts
First,
the government have to build accessible and useful gyms and Linking Words
second,
the taxes on unbeneficial foods should be raised.Linking Words
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