The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. • You should write at least 150 words. • You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

• You should write at least 150 words.

• You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The bar chart illustrates that three different
age
and gender groups had heart attacks in
United
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the United
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States
America
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. The unit is measured in thousands.
Overall
, it is evident that
highest
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the highest
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percentage of heart
attack
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attacks
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in males in older
age
or more than
women
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in women
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at
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in
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younger
age
group
had
Lowest
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the Lowest
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side. In the
age
group
of 29-
44
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44,
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males had at 123 thousand but
according to
age
groups
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groups,
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it's significantly going up with
age
group
of 45 to 65 had at 424. In
older
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an older
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group
of males which are 65 and
more
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older
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at 440. In
females
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females,
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there are three
age
group
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groups
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first
group
having
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history
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a history
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of 3
whereas
second
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the second
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age
group
from 45 to 65
had at
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136.
Moreover
,
last
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group
which was
oldest
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the oldest
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had
at
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apply
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374.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • occurrence
  • prevalence
  • age group
  • gender disparities
  • notable trends
  • significant
  • comparison
  • discrepancies
  • patterns
  • statistics
  • demographics
  • rate of incidence
  • proportion
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