The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. • You should write at least 150 words. • You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The bar chart illustrates that three different
age
and gender groups had heart attacks in United
States Correct article usage
the United
America
. The unit is measured in thousands.
Change preposition
of America
Overall
, it is evident that highest
percentage of heart Correct article usage
the highest
attack
in males in older Fix the agreement mistake
attacks
age
or more than women
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in women
at
younger Change preposition
in
age
group
had Lowest
side.
In the Correct article usage
the Lowest
age
group
of 29-44
males had at 123 thousand but Add a comma
44,
according to
age
groups
it's significantly going up with Add a comma
groups,
age
group
of 45 to 65 had at 424. In older
Add an article
an older
the older
group
of males which are 65 and more
at 440.
In Correct word choice
older
females
there are three Add a comma
females,
age
group
first Fix the agreement mistake
groups
group
having
Wrong verb form
has
history
of 3 Add an article
a history
whereas
second
Correct article usage
the second
age
group
from 45 to 65 had at
136. Wrong verb form
has
Moreover
, last
Change the article
the last
group
which was oldest
had Correct article usage
the oldest
at
374.Change preposition
apply
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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