In a public-funded healthcare system, people who are willing to pay for the best and fast treatment should be able to do so. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Most
of
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apply
the
countries have Correct article usage
apply
public-funded
healthcare Correct article usage
a public-funded
system
to help their people
can
access good doctors and medicals.Verb problem
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This
organization helps poor or medium class
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medium-class
family
financially as the cost of medicine and medical care are very expensive but some Fix the agreement mistake
families
people
who has
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have
money
want faster and better treatment
.I'm not agree
with Change the verb form
I do not agree
this
statement because this
system
was created for every person.
To commence with,in this
system
all Add a comma
system,
people
should be treated and inspected equally.to elaborate it
,in Correct pronoun usage
apply
this
public Correct determiner usage
these
oranizations
poor and rich Correct your spelling
organisations
people
are evaluated by same
doctors and nurses Correct article usage
the same
.
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This
this
system
is the back pillar of poor people
who are fininacially
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financially
weakand
are not able to go to big hospitals in critical illness.Correct your spelling
weak and
for
example,Capitalize word
For
accoring
to the medical survey by world health organization Correct your spelling
according
this
orgazization
save more than 80,000 Correct your spelling
organization
organisation
people
lives who are poor from back.thus
its
very important to have Replace the word
it's
it is
this
system
in our world.
furthermore
,some people
are willing to pay more for the best and fast
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fastest
treatment
.
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These
this
types of people
are not doing fair with this
system
.To elaborate it
,if Correct pronoun usage
apply
this
system
runs according to
money
that
who Correct pronoun usage
those
has
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have
money
get faster and better treatment
then
poor people
need to wait outside medical halls many
hours or Change preposition
for many
may be
some days Correct your spelling
maybe
due to
which chances of illness and death got
increase.Verb problem
apply
for
instance,Capitalize word
For
according to
world news because of this
kind of people
almost 3000 average people
lost their lives every year.hence
,rich people
dont
need to Correct your spelling
don't
took
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take
advantages
of Fix the agreement mistake
advantage
this
organization if they want better and fast
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faster
treatment
they can go to private institution
.
In conclusion,public-funded health care Fix the agreement mistake
institutions
system
are best for all Fix the agreement mistake
systems
kind
of Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
people
which help
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helps
people
to save their
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apply
money
,time and they can access good doctors and medical services .Submitted by dilpreetsingh7049 on
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