In a public-funded healthcare system, people who are willing to pay for the best and fast treatment should be able to do so. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Most
of
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the
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countries have
public-funded
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a public-funded
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healthcare
system
to help their
people
can
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access good doctors and medicals.
This
organization helps poor or
medium class
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medium-class
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family
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families
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financially as the cost of medicine and medical care are very expensive but some
people
who
has
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money
want faster and better
treatment
.
I'm not agree
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with
this
statement because
this
system
was created for every person. To commence with,in
this
system
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all
people
should be treated and inspected equally.to elaborate
it
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,in
this
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these
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public
oranizations
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organisations
poor and rich
people
are evaluated by
same
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the same
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doctors and nurses
.
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This
this
system
is the back pillar of poor
people
who are
fininacially
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financially
weakand
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weak and
are not able to go to big hospitals in critical illness.
for
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example,
accoring
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according
to the medical survey by world health organization
this
orgazization
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organization
organisation
save more than 80,000
people
lives who are poor from back.
thus
its
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very important to have
this
system
in our world.
furthermore
,some
people
are willing to pay more for the best and
fast
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fastest
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treatment
.
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These
this
types of
people
are not doing fair with
this
system
.To elaborate
it
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,if
this
system
runs
according to
money
that
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those
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who
has
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have
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money
get faster and better
treatment
then
poor
people
need to wait outside medical halls
many
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for many
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hours or
may be
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maybe
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some days
due to
which chances of illness and death
got
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increase.
for
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instance,
according to
world news because of
this
kind of
people
almost 3000 average
people
lost their lives every year.
hence
,rich
people
dont
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don't
need to
took
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advantages
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advantage
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of
this
organization if they want better and
fast
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faster
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treatment
they can go to private
institution
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institutions
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. In conclusion,public-funded health care
system
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systems
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are best for all
kind
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kinds
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of
people
which
help
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helps
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people
to save
their
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apply
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money
,time and they can access good doctors and medical services .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Healthcare system
  • Public-funded
  • Private healthcare
  • Two-tier system
  • Equity
  • Efficiency
  • Universal access
  • Resource allocation
  • Quality of care
  • Queue skipping
  • Economic impact
  • Ethical considerations
  • Accessibility
  • Public investment
  • Health outcomes
  • Social inequality
  • Health insurance
  • Privilege
  • Funding
  • Resource distribution
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