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The following pie charts show the results of a survey into the most popular leisure activities in the United States of America in 1999 and 2009.

The following pie charts show the results of a survey into the most popular leisure activities in the United States of America in 1999 and 2009.
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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of the most widespread leisure activities in the United States of America in the years 1999 and 2009.
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, it is clearly apparent that walking is the most popular
activity
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 in both years. Surprisingly, amount of people who
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 swimming
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increased significantly over the period. In 1999, the highest number of people walked in their spare time which was 29%,
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 the least recorded
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 was yoga accounted for only 5%, which doubled in 2009
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 10%. The second highest
activity
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 was soccer , which made up 17%. Aerobics is recorded for 13% but that became less popular in 2009 and the percentage fell dramatically to 4%. In 2009, walking remained a more famous
activity
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 , which constituted 2% higher compared to 1999. Surprisingly, swimming and soccer depicted the same figure of 18% each. The
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 interesting
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 was jogging recorded for only 3%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words activity with synonyms.
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