Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world’s facing today.What are the cause of global warming and what measures can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue?

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Climate change is the major
problem
the world is facing. There are several
factors
involved
such
as burning fossil fuel, industrialization, deforestation and many more. The local governmental
organization
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and
individual
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individuals
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can bring
the
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big changes in
this
issue.
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why is it happening and put forward several solutions to
this
problem
.
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, we will discuss
one
of the major
factors
such
as
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deforestation, as the cities are growing and expanding cutting down
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trees
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and forest is
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common
problem
which is indirectly leading
into
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the
factors
such
as poor air quality which is bringing several issues in
life
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of the healthy individual
such
as stress, anxiety, premature birth rate and many more. For
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problems
goverment
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government
can promote programmes
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as
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more tress, focusing more on public transport, using bicycles
travelling
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to travel
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for shorter
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distances
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,
praticing
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practising
healthy
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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of
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individual
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individuals
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,
setting
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up regular check programmes for
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individual
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individuals
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. So, all of these will promote more towards
healthy
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environment. The other
problem
which came into view is the burning of fossil fuels,
this
cause
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pollution
to the environment
which
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resulting
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the
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global warming. Several world leaders are working together to overcome
this
problem
by focusing
onto
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their country and setting up the best examples for the world.
For example
, using renewable sources of
energy
as a fuel to reduce air
pollution
and control the depletion of
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the ozone
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layer. Using solar
energy
and wind
energy
as
an
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energy
sources can bring
a big changes
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big changes
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in environmental
pollution
control,
by
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the efforts of the government.
One
more example by
one
of the
government
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have
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seen using solar
energy
as
main
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source of
energy
for
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street lights and giving subsidy help to
the
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individual
household
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households
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to promote having solar panels in their household to use as an
energy
source. In conclusion, I can state that
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deforestation, burning of fossil
fuel
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fuels
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and air
pollution
are
the
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some
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one
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of the
factors
that
is
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causing global warming but there are other
factors
as well
such
as rising
in
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sea
level
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levels
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, changes in temperature, health of the individual and many more. But there are
solution
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solutions
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to overcome every
problem
and
with
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the efforts of the
govermental
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governmental
organization and individual
household
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households
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can bring a big change to
this
problem
.
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task achievement
The essay covers the main points and provides relevant examples, but it needs more detailed explanations for each problem and solution. Try to delve deeper into each cause and effect to enhance the completeness of the response. For example, provide specific statistics or case studies to support your points.
coherence cohesion
The essay follows a logical structure but could benefit from clearer linking phrases or transition words to create a smoother flow between paragraphs and ideas. For instance, phrases like ‘on the other hand,’ ‘furthermore,’ or ‘as a result’ could help in making the transitions smoother.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction and conclusion are well-presented, summarizing the key points effectively and providing a clear stance on the topic.
relevant specific examples
The use of relevant and specific examples, such as government initiatives using solar energy, strengthens the arguments made in the essay.
clear comprehensive ideas
The main points regarding deforestation and fossil fuels are clearly identified and explained, offering a good starting point for a comprehensive discussion on the topic.

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