The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that the working week should be shorter and employers should have longer holidays.

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essay totally disagrees with that statement. I believe that longer weekends have bad sides,

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as decreasing incomes and increasing the slothfulness of all

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. First of all, if working weeks are shorter,

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workers

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will not work enough

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, they will not get enough salaries.

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, my friend's dad. He is an accountant.

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, he worked enough

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, about 6 hours on weekdays every day. But,

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his manager said that the government cut their workdays to 3 days.

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, he was happy;

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, he did not know that he would have

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incomes

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. So, in the end, he had many problems

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as health problems both mental and physical, not having a normal house, not paying for

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the

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of his children

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not having enough money In my opinion, the second reason for my disagreement with that statement is laziness. All

workers

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will be happy if their workdays are cut down. Because, they will employ less than usual, but

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they will suffer from laziness. They do not want to do anything, even little housework

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as cleaning and vacuuming.

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, my elder brother's boss decreased his

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of job

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his very good creativity. His boss thought that he should not think most of the

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, so the boss gave him

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weekdays. But, in the end, my brother ended up losing his job because he was so lazy that he did not even go to his job

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on his weekdays. In conclusion, for a high percentage of the population, cutting down on working weeks and increasing weekends are less important than working with usual

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because of

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salaries and laziness of

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Provide a more balanced discussion by considering potential benefits of shorter working weeks in addition to the drawbacks.

coherence cohesion

Work on paragraph development, ensuring that each paragraph contains a single main idea that is clearly expressed and developed.

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Clear thesis statement in the introduction that outlines the main argument of the essay.

coherence cohesion

Logical organization of ideas with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.

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Relevant examples provided to support the main points, adding credibility to the arguments.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

301 words

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