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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The picture
illustareate
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illustrate
illustrates
 some information about
noodle
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the noodle
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 process. All of the steps are done in a company except for the first step which is storage silos flour which brings by a trolly. In
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the secound
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secound
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second
 step
flours
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flour
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pouring
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is poured
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in
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into
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 a huge dish with water and oil
that is
mixer
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mixed
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 after
that
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that,
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 they put in rollers in dough sheets. In
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the forth
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forth
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fourth
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 section dough make them strips and
then
 they get in noodles discs
then
 they
cooking
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cook
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 with oil and drying
atfer
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after
 that they put in cups and
adds
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add
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 some vegetables with spices. The latest process is
labelelling
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labelling
 and sealing. In all making noodles has eight sections that produce noodles from flour
with
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apply
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using
speciall
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special
divices
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devices
 that are in a
manufacure
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manufacture
the
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The
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 material that
are
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is
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 used in
this
 product are water, oil, flour
that is
 the most important
one
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apply
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vegtetables
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vegetables
 and
also
 spices.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Manufacturing process
  • Noodle dough
  • Steaming
  • Cutting
  • Dough sheeting
  • Molding
  • Air-drying
  • Frying
  • Seasoning
  • Quality control
  • Packaging
  • Shelf life
  • Flavoring agents
  • Texture
  • Instant meal
  • Convenience food
  • Production line
  • Consumer
  • Ingredient mixing
  • Safety standards
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