The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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some information about Correct your spelling
illustrate
illustrates
noodle
process. All of the steps are done in a company except for the first step which is storage silos flour which brings by a trolly.
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the noodle
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the secound
secound
step Correct your spelling
second
flours
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flour
pouring
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is poured
in
a huge dish with water and oil Change preposition
into
that is
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mixer
after Replace the word
mixed
that
they put in rollers in dough sheets. In Add a comma
that,
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the forth
forth
section dough make them strips and Correct your spelling
fourth
then
they get in noodles discs Linking Words
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cooking
with oil and drying Wrong verb form
cook
atfer
that they put in cups and Correct your spelling
after
adds
some vegetables with spices. The latest process is Correct subject-verb agreement
add
labelelling
and sealing.
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labelling
with
using Change preposition
apply
speciall
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special
divices
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devices
manufacure
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manufacture
the
material that Capitalize word
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are
used in Change the verb form
is
this
product are water, oil, flour Linking Words
that is
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one
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apply
vegtetables
and Correct your spelling
vegetables
also
spices.Linking Words
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