The graph below gives information on the number of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020

The graph below gives information on the number of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020
The graph below represents the participant numbers for several activities at a social
center
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in Melbourne, Australia, over the years 2000 to 2020.
Overall
, the
most
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highest count of attendees was Film Club,
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the smallest result was
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dramatics
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. Martial arts was the only participant to see a decline in admissions.
On the other hand
, Film Club showed a very strong performance through the period,
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reaching more than 60 in 2000 and ending
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than 70 in 2020 which is very well.
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the lowest score amateur dramatics had a good result in the first two years with more and less than 30 but in 2010 started to decrease and ended with under 10. Musical performances had 0 in 2000 and 2005,
however
in 2010 the number began increasing and in the final year
2010
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it became a little less than 20.
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, Table Tennis was one of the lowest rated, but it raised from fewer than 20 to over 50 and became
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highest rated number. Martial arts was between
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30 and 40 during these twenty years.
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