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The diagram illustrates how recycled paper is made. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates how recycled paper is made. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram describes the
process
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 of
paper
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 recycled.
Overall
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 ,
this
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 is a cyclical man-made
process
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 with four main stages , it starts with making pulp and ends with producing recycled
paper
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. Looking at the main first stage , used
paper
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 is collected and
then
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it
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apply
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mixed with water and chemicals.
In addition
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 , it
then
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become
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becomes
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 unfiltered pulp so that residents can purify to
mixture
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.In the next stage was filter, the
mixture
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are
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is
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 cleaned and which
become
Correct subject-verb agreement
becomes
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 filtered pulp.Especially, in the main
third-stage
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third stage
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, the
process
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 of
made
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making
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paper
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will be
Verb problem
,
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added
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add
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 water and soap and collab with
increase
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increased
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 air pump into the
mixture
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.
However
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 ,one of the most
materials
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important materials
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 was ink which chemicals very important in the
process
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 so that
paper
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have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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 light products
easy
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and easy
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approach
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to approach
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with
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apply
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customer
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customers
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.
Additionally
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 , the
mixture
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 is cleaned again and dried.
Finally
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,it paid off after a long
process
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words process, paper, mixture with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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