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The table below shows the projected costings over the next five years in American dollars for three environmental projects sustainable forestry.

The table below shows the projected costings over the next five years in American dollars for three environmental projects sustainable forestry.
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The table provides the numbers of hospitals'
same day
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 and overnight stays in five Australian states for
last
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 year,
while
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 the pie chart illustrates the percentages of
last
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 year's indicators in private and public hospitals.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that
the
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New South Wales had the highest
number
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, followed by
the
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South
Australia
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 having
tinier
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a smaller
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 quantity than
the
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New South Wales, in parallel
with
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,
while
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 the same
days
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 of a public institution were equal, the overnights were shorter than the
days
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 in private
institutions
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. As can be seen from the figure,
the
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 South Wales had the highest rate of 6,097 in the state hospitals , out of a total of 8,323.
However
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,
this
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 rate was only 10 points lower than Victoria's in private ownership.
In contrast
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, South
Australia
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 had the lowest
number
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 of
days
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 in public
institutions
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, at 1,591,
while
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 private
institutions
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 had 617.
In addition
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, the total
number
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 was
also
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 the lowest at 2,209.
Furthermore
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, Western
Australia
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's figures were similar to those of
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South
Australia
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 , with a difference of 343. The remaining two states had average figures, with Victoria at 6,842 and Queensland at 5,191. As for the pie chart, more than half of the 100 per cent table was owned by state
institution
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, with 30% to 60% of the remaining 40% owned by private individuals, with the same
number
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 of
days
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 and at least 14% of the nights.
It is clear that
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 if we look at each individually,
this
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 indicator is
also
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 shown in the general and psychiatric departments of both private and public
institutions
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, last, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, australia, days, institutions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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