32.The chart below shows women aged from 16 to 25 in particular country who prefer to watch or participate in a variety of sports. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

32.The chart below shows women aged from 16 to 25 in particular country who prefer to watch or participate in a variety of sports. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar graph illustrates
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the females
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females
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female
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group
age
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aged
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from 16 to 25 who took part in different sports (
tennis
,
baksetball
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basketball
, athletics, badminton, golf and horse riding and racing ) in
certain
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a certain
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country
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countries
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in 2000
,
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apply
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and
compred
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compared
to
women
who liked to watch.
Overall
, the percentage of
women
who
preferd
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preferred
prefer
to watch was the highest in
tennis
,
while
the highest
number
of players was in both
tennis
and golf. The significant feature was the
number
of
women
who took part in horse riding and racing was double the
number
of
females
who watched. There was a significant increase
between
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the
number
of
women
who watched
tennis
sport and others who played ( 30 and 50 respectively).
While
the
number
of
females
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female
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players in golf was more than
other
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another group
other groups
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group
(30 to only 10 respectively).
Similarly
, the figure of
women
who participated in horse riding was higher than the second
group
( around 20 and below 10 respectively).
On the other hand
,
females
took part in basketball and athletics at around 20, which was greater than the
number
of people who watched was around 10. The
number
of ladies who
involved
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were involved
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in badminton was higher than
other
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another group
other groups
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group
( above 10 and under 5 respectively)
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words females, group, tennis, women, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.

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  • participation rate
  • popularity
  • preference
  • trend
  • compare
  • contrast
  • notable differences
  • cultural factors
  • social influences
  • predict
  • data
  • evident
  • sporting activities
  • age group
  • demographic
  • engage in sports
  • viewership
  • spectators
  • gender-specific trends
  • analyze
  • summarize
  • percentage
  • notable
  • significant
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