32.The chart below shows women aged from 16 to 25 in particular country who prefer to watch or participate in a variety of sports. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar graph illustrates
Correct article usage
the females
females
Change the noun form
female
group
age
from 16 to 25 who took part in different sports ( Wrong verb form
aged
tennis
, baksetball
, athletics, badminton, golf and horse riding and racing ) in Correct your spelling
basketball
certain
Add an article
a certain
country
in 2000 Fix the agreement mistake
countries
,
and Remove the comma
apply
compred
to Correct your spelling
compared
women
who liked to watch.
Overall
, the percentage of women
who preferd
to watch was the highest in Correct your spelling
preferred
prefer
tennis
, while
the highest number
of players was in both tennis
and golf. The significant feature was the number
of women
who took part in horse riding and racing was double the number
of females
who watched.
There was a significant increase between
the Change preposition
in
number
of women
who watched tennis
sport and others who played ( 30 and 50 respectively). While
the number
of females
players in golf was more than Change the noun form
female
other
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another group
other groups
group
(30 to only 10 respectively). Similarly
, the figure of women
who participated in horse riding was higher than the second group
( around 20 and below 10 respectively).
On the other hand
, females
took part in basketball and athletics at around 20, which was greater than the number
of people who watched was around 10. The number
of ladies who involved
in badminton was higher than Add a missing verb
were involved
other
Change the wording
another group
other groups
group
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words females, group, tennis, women, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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