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Writing Samples
Band 5

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed contries should give other types of help to the poor contries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no denying the fact that help
has
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 various ways to aid
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 it is a commonly held belief that rich regions often give money to poor countries, there is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that any rich or wealthy country should be involved with assistance and support these poorer nations.
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rich
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the rich
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 country has massive budgets to help
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 nations.
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, we saw several
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contries
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countries
 to help poorer
people
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 and that was
significant
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initiatives
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 in our society.
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, certainly the development
contries
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 has a lot of potential to support their poor families.
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, volunteers are helping them especially in Covid invades.
They
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people
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were needs
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 to help them and Saudi Arabia was assisting with food and medical care. Another point to consider, our society after
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COVID-19
 has
more
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apply
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concentrate
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to help
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on helping
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 poverty
people
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. It is
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 possible to say that,
they
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the
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 poor
people
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 did not have enough money or vaccines so, we saw in
news
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the news
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 a lot of
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contries
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countries
help
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 them by sending crew members to see their poor
people
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.
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, the advanced
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contries
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countries
 were given a lot of food and clothing.
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, if we
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 on financial aid , it will not help enough for those poorest families ,
thus
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 we will need to increase focus on
another types
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another type
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 of aid
such
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 as
,
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built
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building
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 educational programs and
provide
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providing
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 more hospitals. In conclusion, despite
people
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 having different views, I believe that helping with all sorts
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is crucial
on
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for
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 rich or developing
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contries
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countries
.

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clarity
Try to enhance the clarity of your ideas by avoiding repetitive statements and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear main idea supported with specific examples or evidence.
grammar
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and sentence structure to produce a higher quality essay. Consider practicing various types of sentences to improve your overall writing ability.
structure
Make sure your introduction and conclusion clearly summarise the stance and key points discussed in the essay. Both should align well with the arguments provided in the main body.
task response
The essay addresses the given task effectively, providing a clear stance on the issue of financial aid versus other types of help from rich countries to poor countries.
coherence
The essay demonstrates a thoughtful approach to the subject, illustrating an understanding of the complexities involved in alleviating poverty.
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