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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newsport city centre from 2003-2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparations where relevant

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newsport city centre from 2003-2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparations where relevant
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The given line graph shows the
incidents
 of
buglary
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burglary
,
car
theft
 and
robbery
 in three
distinc
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distinct
area
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areas
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 in
Newsport
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Newport
 city
center
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centre
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 from 2003 to 2012.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that
car
theft
 and
robbery
 have
relatively
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a relatively
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 stable
number
 of
incidents
 among the others throughout the year studied,
while
buglary
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burglary
 activities
on the other hand
, somehow saw a dramatical
down trend
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downtrend
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. In terms of the biggest incident in the early period, it is apparent that
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hold
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held
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 the biggest
number
 at just
bellow
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below
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 3500
incidents
 before reaching its peak at
mere
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a mere
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 3750 activities,
then
 fell dramatically to its lowest of approximately 750 reports, and
finally
 experienced a plateau at just bellow 1500 until the final year period.
On the other hand
,
car
theft
 and
robbery
 remained stable from
its
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their
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 initial figures 2750 and 600 respectively in the first period
,
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apply
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 and experienced a slight fluctuation before reaching their final
number
 at below 2500 for
car
theft
while
 the
robbery
incidents
stick
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stuck
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 to
its
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their
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origin
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original
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number
at
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in
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 the final year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words incidents, car, theft, robbery, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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