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The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied
bart
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bar
 chart indicates how many men and
women
 participated
different
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in different
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 afternoon courses at an adult
education
institue
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institute
 in 2009.
Moreover
,the provided pie chart illustrates data about how old were these
people
. It can be clearly seen that the highest
number
 of
participants
 were
women
 who attended
to
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apply
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the language course.
However
,
women
 did not prefer to learn sculpture in these courses.
In addition
,the highest
number
 of
people
 who attended
in
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an
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education
 centre was over 50
years
 old in 2009. In 2009,precisely 40
women
 decided to take up the language course (which was the highest
number
 of
participants
 over the period),compared to the
number
 of
women
 who chose to learn painting at exactly 30
people
 in 2009.
Additionally
,%42 of
participants
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the participants
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 were more than 50
years
 old.(Which was the highest percentage of
people
 who attended over the whole year).
In contrast
,the
number
 of men who participated in drama
course
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courses
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 were the same as men in sculpture classes at 10
people
,just ahead of
women
 who liked to learn sculpture at roughly 5
people
 in 2009.(Which was the least
number
 of
participants
 over the period).Surprisingly,the percentage of
people
 who were between 20 and 29
years
 old and attended
to
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the adult
education
 centre was a bit the same as
people
 under 20
years
 old at %11 and %5,respectively.(Which were the lowest percentage of ages in
education
 courses over the whole year).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, education, people, number, participants, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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