Some people believe that children should not be given homework everyday, while others believe that they must get homework everyday in order to be successful at school. discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Homework is a subject for discussion among people. One group
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part of
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education to gain success
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drain the
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performance. In
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let some evidence about
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discussion and give my opinion of those arguments.
To begin
with, Homework is frequently considered as a support of school`s
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lessons
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lesson.
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some subjects like geometry and physics need
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in order to manage with variety of data and make
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to solve tasks with
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indicators.
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critical thinking and students will obtain
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to operate massive
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of information in our modern world. Some youth will continue to study in
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and colleges and
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school`s
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background will play
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role
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in exams
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conducted in those institutions.
On the other hand
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all student`s time.
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their creativity.
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people who tend to be an actress,
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or painters. They all need time to
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achieve
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of inspiration and motivation to create something unique.
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, as history shows to us the famous and
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artwork was created once in a lifetime for most
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genius people. So if the lifestyle of
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will be
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strictly organised it will have
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the negative
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consequence of
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creativity
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individuals in
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future. To sum it up,
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opinion flexible way to approach
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the
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students is much more productive rather
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one
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side strict organisation of their lifestyle. Some genius and
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talented
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pupils
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can be suppressed by
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the education
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system.
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grammar
Try to avoid spelling and grammar mistakes. Double-check your work for errors such as "student's" instead of "student`s," and "lessons" instead of "lessos."
lexical resource
Enhance your vocabulary by using more varied and precise words. For instance, you could use "burdensome" instead of "drain the pupil performance."
coherence
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence. This will help to make your essay more coherent.
task achievement
Support your arguments with more specific examples and evidence. For example, mention specific studies or expert opinions on the impact of homework on student performance.
task achievement
You have a clear understanding of the argument and provide a balanced discussion on both sides of the issue.
coherence
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your opinion, aligning well with the arguments presented.
cohesion
You attempt to use linking phrases such as "To begin with" and "On the other hand," which helps in organizing the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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