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The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map illustrates how a science park has developed from 2008 to
present
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the present
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that there have been several changes, including the cutting down of the green belt, the introduction of cycle
path
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paths
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 and the expansions of car
park
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parks
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 and cyber security. Looking at the north side, the green belt was cut down and there was an introduction of research and development,
while
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 offices have remained unchanged. Another change is that the reception was demolished and replaced by a university hub, albeit the business units
were remained
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remained
have remained
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 without changes.
Moreover
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, there were
implementions
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implementations
implementation
 of
cycle
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a cycle
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 path and
the
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a
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 bus stop. Regarding the south side, there was
a
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the
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 construction of
cycle
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a cycle
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 path,
whereas
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car
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the car
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 park has
reduced
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been reduced
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 in size. The IT centre was renovated to the innovation centre.
While
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 the
green belt
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Green Belt
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 was demolished and cyber security
has
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was
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 extended. A final change is that there was a creation of the station.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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