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The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map illustrates how a science park has developed from 2008 to
present
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the present
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.
Overall
, it can be seen that there have been several changes, including the cutting down of the green belt, the introduction of cycle
path
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paths
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 and the expansions of car
park
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parks
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 and cyber security. Looking at the north side, the green belt was cut down and there was an introduction of research and development,
while
 offices have remained unchanged. Another change is that the reception was demolished and replaced by a university hub, albeit the business units
were remained
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remained
have remained
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 without changes.
Moreover
, there were
implementions
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implementations
implementation
 of
cycle
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a cycle
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 path and
the
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a
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 bus stop. Regarding the south side, there was
a
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the
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 construction of
cycle
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a cycle
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 path,
whereas
car
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the car
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 park has
reduced
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been reduced
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 in size. The IT centre was renovated to the innovation centre.
While
 the
green belt
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Green Belt
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 was demolished and cyber security
has
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was
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 extended. A final change is that there was a creation of the station.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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